Transforming "these + noun + have a".

I saw this sentence today:

[STRIKE]Odd sense of fairness, these kids![/STRIKE]

That is obviously a part of the whole "these kids have got a stupid sense fairness". I was just wondering if there are any restrictions upon transformations of the "these + noun + have a" type.

For example, how do these sound?

1. these patients have a normal menstrual history and are of proved fertility >>> normal menstrual history and (are) of proved fertility, these patients

2. these guys have a shot in being the BEST dancers of all time >>> have a shot in being the BEST dancers of all time, these guys

3. most of these patients have a coarctation >>> have a coarctation, most of these patients

4. These discus have a distinctive pattern of fine lines and dots on their gill plates >>> have a distinctive pattern of fine lines and dots on their gill plates, these discus

5. the new model has a global positioning system >>> a global positioning system, the new model has

Your examples sound like Yoda from Star Wars. The original example works because first of all, it's an exclamation, and second of all your examples sound too serious/scientific.

No, none of your examples work, because this pattern is really intended to make a joke or ironic statement. The original sentence you asked about implies that most people would find what the kids are doing not fair at all.

The best explanation I can come up with is that the first sentence is a transformation:

What a (noun phrase) these (plural noun) have

becomes

(noun phrase), these (plural noun)

And I would really expect the noun phrase to be succinct and, in a sense, obvious. For instance, "Distinctive pattern, these discus" sounds a lot better to me than the way you phrased it, and I would expect to understand how the pattern is distinctive as soon as I looked at the discus.

I agree with Umm and Rapp: none of those examples work.