The speech opened the floodgates of inspiration and allowed for dreams to be dreamt.
How would you modify this sentence?
How would you modify this sentence?
opened the floodgates
The speech opened the floodgates of inspiration and allowed for big dreams and aspirations to be harbored.
Any better?
Any better?
<<The speech opened the floodgates of inspiration and allowed for big dreams and aspirations to be harbored.
Any better? >>
Not really. Worse actually, because it makes less sense. ('harbour' is the gainside and opposite of 'opened floodgates')
His/Her speech on <insert subject here> opened floodgates on inspiration and allowed unrealised dreams to come alive by/through <insert reason here>.
Try that ;)
When is this due?
Any better? >>
Not really. Worse actually, because it makes less sense. ('harbour' is the gainside and opposite of 'opened floodgates')
His/Her speech on <insert subject here> opened floodgates on inspiration and allowed unrealised dreams to come alive by/through <insert reason here>.
Try that ;)
When is this due?
Thanks Leasnam.
But that tweaks the meaning I intended. I didn't mean to say the speech allowed for dreams to come true. Rather, I was trying to imply that the speech showed that it is ok to dream. As for dream fulfillment, that's a different story.
Also, aren't you missing a 'the' before 'floodgates'?
Due tomorrow :)
But that tweaks the meaning I intended. I didn't mean to say the speech allowed for dreams to come true. Rather, I was trying to imply that the speech showed that it is ok to dream. As for dream fulfillment, that's a different story.
Also, aren't you missing a 'the' before 'floodgates'?
Due tomorrow :)
The speech opened the floodgates of inspiration and proved it all right, even rewarding, to dive for big dreams.
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<<Also, aren't you missing a 'the' before 'floodgates'? >>
Could go either way--I personnally prefer it sans 'the'
ok, so tomorrow, GREAT. I love a deadline challenge! :]
<<The speech opened the floodgates of inspiration and proved it all right, even rewarding, to dive for big dreams. >>
This is good. Perhaps 'acceptqable' for 'all right' and 'reach/aim/target/aspire' instead of 'dive'?
Could go either way--I personnally prefer it sans 'the'
ok, so tomorrow, GREAT. I love a deadline challenge! :]
<<The speech opened the floodgates of inspiration and proved it all right, even rewarding, to dive for big dreams. >>
This is good. Perhaps 'acceptqable' for 'all right' and 'reach/aim/target/aspire' instead of 'dive'?
Thanks. I chose 'dive' based on the good point you made about habor above. That flood of inspiration could provide a diving environment for dreams.
Does that make sense?
Does that make sense?
Have you considered 'dive in'?
"The speech opened the floodgates of inspiration and proved it acceptable, even rewarding, to dive in for big dreams"
"The speech opened the floodgates of inspiration and proved it acceptable, even rewarding, to dive in for big dreams"
Please, that is NOT the way you should decide! LOL :P
Anyway, Good Luck on your speech/paper. Get an A!
Anyway, Good Luck on your speech/paper. Get an A!
The original sentence was fine. It might not win a Nobel Prize, but you wouldn't win a Nobel Prize anyway, so it's good enough.
Why do people always tell learners to munt up their writing for no reason? Besides, your 'fine tuning' is not even much better...
Why do people always tell learners to munt up their writing for no reason? Besides, your 'fine tuning' is not even much better...